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      [P] Broken in Two

      ---I used to be better at writing poems, but this is my latest attempt at trying to get back into it. I'm not sure if it's any good, but it means a lot to me and represents my life quite a bit. I hope it's okay though too. I'm always ready to improve.---

      One bound in the light
      One bound in the dark
      Separate to live each life
      Forever split, forever apart

      Plains dissolve and divide
      The ending of this, the ending of all
      Cries never stop, the end is nigh
      Is this me? Is this my call?

      Torment collected, they see me suffer
      Two sides lie within, neither surrender
      What am I? I am rent, torn asunder
      Sounds plague me, like thunder

      Everything falls, everything collapses
      No more dark, no more light
      It all turns to ashes
      It's always a fight

      This will never cease
      I am meant to craze
      Why can't it be? Why not release?
      I am broken, I am aged

      Intensity rises, never declining
      Mind lost to insanity long since days past
      Eternity seems to haunt me, soul battered and relying
      On something I forget, fast

      Something ethereal, something unknown
      Knowledge lost to time, buried in depth
      I am nothing, yet I fear being alone
      This is my last, this is my death
      Spiral -by- Godsmack -- Sometimes we only live for the here and now. Sometimes we're lonely. Sometimes we feel we need a place to be grounded... or fly away again. I will fly away again. I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away. Live again. Here forever. The spiral never ends. Why are we feeling something's familiar around us? Are we just dreaming? Always we search for the answers but nothing is found. We fly away again. I will fly away again.

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      Re: [P] Broken in Two

      I am loving the angst and the lack of structure here, two traits that absolutely compliment one another. The quick pace also helps in getting your point across as well.

      Kudos on the poem overall, I can relate.
       

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      Re: [P] Broken in Two

      Thanks. ^_^ It means a lot to have someone else like it too.
      Spiral -by- Godsmack -- Sometimes we only live for the here and now. Sometimes we're lonely. Sometimes we feel we need a place to be grounded... or fly away again. I will fly away again. I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away. Live again. Here forever. The spiral never ends. Why are we feeling something's familiar around us? Are we just dreaming? Always we search for the answers but nothing is found. We fly away again. I will fly away again.

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      Thanks, to you for sharing Also really take into mind the compliments I gave you, they are good qualities to have.
       

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      Re: [P] Broken in Two

      You're welcome for sharing ^_^ But at least something comes out of that duo that you mentioned, that's a relief. It's good for something at least. ^_^
      Spiral -by- Godsmack -- Sometimes we only live for the here and now. Sometimes we're lonely. Sometimes we feel we need a place to be grounded... or fly away again. I will fly away again. I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away. Live again. Here forever. The spiral never ends. Why are we feeling something's familiar around us? Are we just dreaming? Always we search for the answers but nothing is found. We fly away again. I will fly away again.

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      I thought it was nicely done, a certain flow to it that one can follow. Genuine soul food
       

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      Re: [P] Broken in Two

      Thanks! ^^
      Spiral -by- Godsmack -- Sometimes we only live for the here and now. Sometimes we're lonely. Sometimes we feel we need a place to be grounded... or fly away again. I will fly away again. I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away. Live again. Here forever. The spiral never ends. Why are we feeling something's familiar around us? Are we just dreaming? Always we search for the answers but nothing is found. We fly away again. I will fly away again.

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